The Forbidden Phoenix
Almost at the end of the revision process... well, this round anyway. I've addressed all the notes that came out of the act 2 reading, and some notes that came from the Citadel's artistic director, Bob Baker. I clarified Horne's desire for the Iron Dragon and what the Iron Dragon could do. The basic idea is that Horne can't stand to not be in control of nature, so Iron Dragon (a.k.a. technology) gives him a measure of control. The transformation of the silk into a person is magical and a great suggestion from Ron (my director).
I also hammered out the link between Phoenix and Iron Dragon and the link between Empress Dowager and Laosan. The changes are pretty minor in terms of plot, but they are pretty major in terms of exposition and character. If I have the major pieces taken care of, then all that's left is a general dialogue polish and notes for the sake of the director and production.
Each revision gets me a step closer, but the finer details are harder to revise because even a stray sentence or word in a sentence can send people off into the wrong direction. I wish there was a line editor in theatre.
Okay, I'm going to work out some frustration on my Wii... provided my arm stops hurting.